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This is the place where you can write a good ending to your short story. As you know, the winner will get an extra homework bonus.
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This is your story after we have corrected it in class:
Yesterday something very strange happened to me.
I went to my uncle's house and I saw a very small cat. It was so small that I almost smashed it when I was going to the kitchen. It had black and blue stripes and it had green eyes. I asked my uncle if it was his cat but he thought that I was crazy because he didn't have a cat. I tried to forget it but that weird cat didn't get out of my mind all night, so, I decided that, after dinner I was going to search for the cat, to take that idea out of my mind.
We had dessert and then I went to my uncle's bedroom. I searched everywhere but I didn't find the cat. I went to the kitchen and I looked inside the closets, under the table, I even looked inside the microwave but there were no signs of a cat.
When I went to sleep I thought that there was no cat after all but in my nightmares I saw it at the garage UNDER THE CAR. It was a very small cat and it attacked me,and then I woke up very scared.
He had not attacked me. It was a dream, but I still wanted to find the cat. I spoke with my uncles and I went to their neighbours’ field, to find it. I saw a girl holding a cat, and I asked her where she had found it.
She replied that she had thought it was very nice and could not resist grabbing him. The poor cat was being hurt by the embrace that the girl gave him until he could run away like an arrow.
I was scared, I had to go after it, could not lose sight of it, had to touch it.
I ran after it for half an hour! Suddenly I was in a dark place, like a black hole. At that moment, I got very scared but the will of touching the cat was so great that I decided to continue running with the hope of finding it.
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And then after running so much I found a circus with lots of animals.
ReplyDeleteI payed the ticket and went to the show, and I saw the same cat performing on a acrobatic show, then I go to the backstage, and met the his owner.
He said that the cat likes to take a walk, but in that day he run away.
I only catch him because the people of the circus helped me to find it.
So I say to the owner if I can grab the cat, and I said that I can.
The cat is very cute, thank you.
Before you go home, would you like to I give you the cat ?
Yes, thank very much
It is for your effort on find the cat.
And then they live happy forever.
THE END
Correction met his owner.
ReplyDeleteI found a large family of cats and beautiful of all colors.
ReplyDeleteI was very happy I discovered that there was no reason to be afraid because I had just won a lot of friends very sweet and affectionate.
Finally I had found the cat I approached very slowly and could get him. I thought the improvement was take him to an association for the protection of animals, but when I got there I could not let him and brought him to my house.
ReplyDeleteI ran for about half an hour, that’s when I decided that I would keep searching for it in the next day, so I went home. I was so surprised when I saw the cat lying on my front door carpet. I went very carefully to the door so that he wouldn’t be scared with me coming and when I got there, I catch the cat and brought it inside of the house. I went to my room so that my parent would not see the cat and I set there for so long just admiring the cat. It was so soft, and it was so calm, just so beautiful but, like it happens all the time, my mother came into my room without knocking on the door and the cat ran away. I was so scared and then, I woke up frightened, but it was all just a dream there was no such thing as a cat with blue stripes and there was no girl or even a mother coming into my room without knocking on the door. It was all okay.
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